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雷哥托福李同学作文批改

2017-12-04 11:55:21 发布 来源:雷哥托福

Its better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents jobs.

When we graduate from the university, we all face the situation of finding a job. Some children choose jobs that are similar or exactly the same to as their parents', but others make the option to start finding a job that has a great difference to their parents'. I hold the opinion that choosing a job different from parents' may help them 指代不明more in the future.

 

First of all, from the perspective of our parents, most of them wish us to have the same job to as theirs.去掉 Because in this way, they can give us some advises and teach us some practical skills in the career and make sure we don't take a wrong path. Some parents even use their interpersonal connections and resources to arrange us into their enterprise or help us to promote the position. I think this kind of "protection" may make us reluctant to start our own career and be content with things as they are. And in this situation, we always lack of courage and fear to make any change. So I state that to choose different job to our parents will give us courage and nerve to start our own business without any outside help.

 

Furthermore, I think the knowledge and skills we learned at university may be good advantages for works in the future. So chooseing jobs that fit in with the our major we study 去掉at university may be helpful to us. If we choose the jobs similar to our parents, what if they are contradicted with the major we studied at school?  Without the professional knowledge learned in the university, we may found it hard to make some improvement in the career.

 

Last but not the least, I believe the jobs we choose happens to be the jobs we like is a fortunate thing. When we do something what we really interest in, we always feel energetic working for a long time without being tired.重新表达下 Even though we have to face some difficulties and obstacles right behind the way to success in the career, we are also still willing to take a chance and do our best. So when you decide to start a job, the interest must be the first point to be considered, and then is what your major. 重新表达下The similarity to your parents' job is the least thing we think about.

 

In conclusion, choosing a job is the decision we should make by ourselves. So don't let other factors that mislead our way to make an option. If you happen to find a job you really like and have enough professional knowledge to help you in the career, just take it without hesitate,要用名词形式 even though it is really different to from your parents.

 

整体还不错,注意:

1.我们or他们,人称尽量保持一致

2.注意下代词的用法,参见gmat~

3.主体段落开头,最好先直接抛出论点

 

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雷哥托福李同学作文批改

2017-12-04 11:55:21 发布 来源: 雷哥托福 4851阅读

Its better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents jobs.

When we graduate from the university, we all face the situation of finding a job. Some children choose jobs that are similar or exactly the same to as their parents', but others make the option to start finding a job that has a great difference to their parents'. I hold the opinion that choosing a job different from parents' may help them 指代不明more in the future.

 

First of all, from the perspective of our parents, most of them wish us to have the same job to as theirs.去掉 Because in this way, they can give us some advises and teach us some practical skills in the career and make sure we don't take a wrong path. Some parents even use their interpersonal connections and resources to arrange us into their enterprise or help us to promote the position. I think this kind of "protection" may make us reluctant to start our own career and be content with things as they are. And in this situation, we always lack of courage and fear to make any change. So I state that to choose different job to our parents will give us courage and nerve to start our own business without any outside help.

 

Furthermore, I think the knowledge and skills we learned at university may be good advantages for works in the future. So chooseing jobs that fit in with the our major we study 去掉at university may be helpful to us. If we choose the jobs similar to our parents, what if they are contradicted with the major we studied at school?  Without the professional knowledge learned in the university, we may found it hard to make some improvement in the career.

 

Last but not the least, I believe the jobs we choose happens to be the jobs we like is a fortunate thing. When we do something what we really interest in, we always feel energetic working for a long time without being tired.重新表达下 Even though we have to face some difficulties and obstacles right behind the way to success in the career, we are also still willing to take a chance and do our best. So when you decide to start a job, the interest must be the first point to be considered, and then is what your major. 重新表达下The similarity to your parents' job is the least thing we think about.

 

In conclusion, choosing a job is the decision we should make by ourselves. So don't let other factors that mislead our way to make an option. If you happen to find a job you really like and have enough professional knowledge to help you in the career, just take it without hesitate,要用名词形式 even though it is really different to from your parents.

 

整体还不错,注意:

1.我们or他们,人称尽量保持一致

2.注意下代词的用法,参见gmat~

3.主体段落开头,最好先直接抛出论点

 

雷哥托福:www.toeflonline.cn;雷哥托福试听课程详情请咨询:400-1816-180


更多免费批改机会,请添加下方小托君微信

雷哥托福小托君微信号:Toefl1234(提前预约哦)




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